Assignment One: Personal Narrative

Friday, December 2, 2011

The Shootout by Sean Davis

Sean Davis was standing at center ice. His stomach was in knots. His knees were trembling. He felt as though he was about to throw up his spaghetti lunch, and he wanted to so he wouldn’t have to face this moment. Yet, he knew he couldn’t because is coaches were depending on him. The parents and fans were depending on him, and most importantly, his team and friends were depending on him. The referee’s whistle blew and he started skating towards the net. There’s no turning back.
It was January of 2007 and a hockey tournament in Fort Wayne, Indiana, called the Silver Stick Mid-West Regional Hockey Tournament was going on. This tournament invited the best hockey clubs in the mid-west (from a certain tier) to come and play in a regional tournament. The winner of this regional tournament would then go to the national tournament. One of the teams in this tournament was the Columbus Flames. The Columbus Flames are a hockey club in a small town in southern Indiana. This club was a pretty good hockey club for a town in Indiana.

In the Silver Stick Tournament championship game the Columbus Flames played against the Ft. Wayne Comets. This game ended in a tie, so to determine the winner there was a shootout. After everyone picked to shoot in the shootout shot (to no avail), the last shooter, a player for the Flames, skated to center ice to shoot. His stomach was in knots and his knees were trembling. His name was Sean Davis.
While standing at center ice Sean looked around at the crowd. The hockey rink was nearly full and everyone in the whole building was looking at him. His nerves were building up inside him.
“I can do this,” he said to himself under his breath in more of a reassuring way than confidence.

“PHEEEEEW”, the referee’s whistled screeched. Sean knew it was now time. He started skating towards the net. He could feel everyone’s eyes boring into him as he made his way towards the net. When he was about 20 feet from the net, he cocked his stick back to shoot. He shot the puck towards the net. When watching the puck soar to the net a matter of 5 seconds seemed like 5 hours. He watched it as it sailed to the net passed the goalies’ stick and into the goal. The crowd went wild. The stands erupted with cheers from all the Columbus fans and the Ft. Wayne fans were silenced. The Columbus team cleared the bench and jumped on top of Sean. The team couldn’t believe it and neither could he. After the team got off of him, he went to congratulate his goalie then he got off the ice to go to the locker room leaving the team and fans still cheering and celebrating because of the outrageous victory.

6 comments:

  1. Sean, are you going to try out for the BC hockey team

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  2. I love the beginning it shows how you used 3rd person to hook the reader with major swag!
    -Tuck da 5'9"

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  3. Is yhis the final game? If not did you win the tournament?

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  4. This is a quality story! You have a lot of potential in writing in your life! Just keep trying!
    -patty cakes

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  5. The third person kinda freaked me out. Justsayin bro.
    -l.petriella

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